HELP!
I need your input on this sonnet for my325 class (ick!) It's
grammatically correct so if you have comments, PLEASE don't say I used
the reflexive improperly.
It's Spenserian (abab bcbc cdcd ee) and below:
She stands at the glass, mien downcast
yet when I gaze above, a smile sits on her lips
and her eyes are lit with joy for me at last,
bringing slow warmth to my fingertips.
Apollo is racing across the sky, illuminating her slips,
seeking the dim echo of her in the window frame,
traveling slowly up her dress to rest upon her hips,
before showing that visage for which he came.
So long ago for her did I seek to aim
and long did I hold her in much regard
until I found her to be previously tame
to the gilded cage so closely barred.
The pluméd bird lives always above
and I ne'er more shall be in love.
It's Spenserian (abab bcbc cdcd ee) and below:
She stands at the glass, mien downcast
yet when I gaze above, a smile sits on her lips
and her eyes are lit with joy for me at last,
bringing slow warmth to my fingertips.
Apollo is racing across the sky, illuminating her slips,
seeking the dim echo of her in the window frame,
traveling slowly up her dress to rest upon her hips,
before showing that visage for which he came.
So long ago for her did I seek to aim
and long did I hold her in much regard
until I found her to be previously tame
to the gilded cage so closely barred.
The pluméd bird lives always above
and I ne'er more shall be in love.
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